This week is about REWRITING, REWRITING and
REWRITING some more! You really need to LOOK at your play and not ignore it
just because it's a challenge.
Have others read it. Read it aloud. Tape record
yourself reading it aloud or others reading it aloud for you and listen back to
it.
Does it sound interesting to you? Is it interesting to them? Do you have a
moment when your audience is really curious about how it will end for your main
character? Is your main character a CHANGED person by the end of the play?
Share your thoughts about where you are in the rewriting stages and be sure to
share how you have GROWN through this process. Give specific examples.
~Mr. Peterson
The way I'm correcting my play is by rewriting it over again. The first time that I corrected my play, I ended up breaking up the play into 3 scenes. I may go back to the way my play is structured and add or take away the amounts of play included right now. However, I am planning on looking over my play this weekend and rewriting it. After I do this, I will record myself reading the play and see if it sounds interesting to me. Later on I will make the necessary corrections and have my sister read it to see what her thoughts are. Some of the questions that I have been keeping in mind are: Do I see my play in a short clip movie? What are the things that 'grab' my attention about a movie or a play? What do other people find interesting about movies or plays? Because creating a play for the first time is hard, I have kept these questions in mind that will help me built my play the best that I can.
ReplyDeleteSo far in rewriting my play, I have added a lot more dialogue and my characters interact more. For example, using the 3D's I was able to distinguish the protagonist and antagonist. Also the character is now more interesting as it leads to the next scene. The final decision has also changed by raising the stakes. The main character now has more to fight for than in the original first draft of the play. Also as I re-read and rewrite my play, it becomes more realistic rather than like a TV show. When I compare my original draft and my second draft based on the dramatic structure I noticed there were some places that were missing such as an inciting moment. I really hadn't focused on how my characters would reach the climax only on the beginning and end. Now I want to review, reread, and if necessary, rewrite my final draft.
ReplyDeleteWhile rewriting my play I've noticed what I need to focus on. One comment a lot of people suggested was not to have a phone call. Phone calls won't let the story have emotion and it was hard to act. I changed the exposition to friends meeting at a yogurt hut instead of a conversation. Another problem was the character development and the plot. The people who revised it said that ending was a little hard to believe and could have had a twist. My characters could have more description and the plot was confusing. Now that I read out loud, I see that the plot and the stage directions are confusing because as it stands the protagonist is everywhere. The stakes have changed due to the change in the exposition and making the resolution a twist. I believe my story is something that wouldn't happen because it sounds like a movie and not realistic. When I change these couple of edits, then I believe my play will be ready to be graded.
ReplyDeleteWhile rewriting this play I realized my original play sucked. I'm bursting with tons of wonderful ideas. I felt my original play was too urban meaning: it captivated ideas only people from my area would understand. I wanted to transition more to a broaden audience and possess alacrity in my words.My play has struggles of everyday teenagers in America. My protagonist Blake has relationship issues with her new boyfriend, antagonist Sebastian, and she struggles to regain her reputation.
ReplyDeleteWhile rewriting my play, I had to create a completely different play. Originally, I was going to have a play based on trench warfare between teenagers and children. Some people liked it. Unfortunately, it was too much like a movie, for I clearly displayed all of the actions of the war, and barely had any dialogue. Anywho, I then decided to look into other ideas for my play. I got an idea from looking at bomb shelters, and I knew that it would be a good idea. I decided to create a play off of the USSR dropping a bomb on the US, and having a family literally tear itself apart. It'll work out in the end. I like the play so far. It's interesting to me. The main characters are actually the children, for they are personifications of the US and the USSR. The parents are the personifications of those who allied with them. By the middle, we don't know what may happen to the parents and the children, but by the end, we know what happens. The main characters are definitely changed; they know what humans taste like.
ReplyDeleteIn this writing process, there have been many flaws in my play. My play had a few events that are not realistic. What I have to do is develop my characters more.In my play, I have to give more characteristics to my characters so that the reader can distinguish between my protagonist and antagonist. Also, I need to raise the stakes in my play. In order to raise the stakes, I have to add more scenes and characters. Adding more characters will increase the amount of emotion in this play. I also need my character to go throuogh a larger problem than what my climax is now. By raising the stakes, my play will be more interesting and dramatic.
ReplyDeleteFor my play it has been a fairly difficult process of creating a story that had high stakes and was interesting. Because of this I have been going through each scene and moment of my play one at a time. Currently I haven't been able to create the ending of my play because of this. Despite this I have a vision for the ending where characters are changed by realizing that their original perceptions of other people was wrong. This realization changes the characters in my play in some way.
ReplyDeleteSo far things are going quite okay with my play. If I was to put more effort into my work then everything will be better. I need to add all the necessary components to my play in order to score high on the rubric and get all the credit that I need. I also need to add more scenes in the beginning in order to develop charachter and lead into the conflict allitle bit smoother. My conflict rises too quick so I need to add some rising action. I also need stage directions and to show my characters thoughts, feelings, and actions through the dialogue. I need to include a title page, character description page, setting, and playwright's notes. Theres still alot to be done in my play and hopefully it will be complete by the final draft.
ReplyDeleteWhile rewriting my play, i realized where i had areas that i could improve on. I added a lot more datail to the character descriptions so that both the actors and audience can get a feel for who the characters in my play really are. Also, going through each scene and each moment of the play at a time allowed me to correct my flaws. Doing this process has helped me grow as a theatre student and also as a playwright. I have the basic skills needed to create a decent play and i look forward to advancing these skills later in life.
ReplyDeleteWhile writing my play over and over again I have realized that I needed to develop the characters more. In the beginning my audience didn't know any background evidence about my characters due to my lack of background information. But as I began to develop my play more I added more definition to my actors. The end of my play doesn't end like a fairy tale. It actually leaves both of my characters in situations they didn't imagine they would encounter. It also leaves the audience in shock because it isn't what they were expecting to happen.
ReplyDeleteMy play took a while to complete; however after completing it I realized that the stakes for my character was not high enough. I had to go back and change the whole play again and revise it until the stakes were high enough. Once finished with that I went back to my play and created more characters and scenes. Adding these made my scene more interesting and longer, causing my play to improve. Another way that I have revised my play is by making my characters more emotionally involved in the story. This makes the play real for the reader. I also added characters that are not very important but kept the play moving. Although revising takes a lot of work and is time consuming, in the end it benefits your play.
ReplyDeleteMy play is still developing. I had to figure out a way to break it up into scenes and then raise the stakes. Therefore i will break my scene up by setting. Also, in order to raise the stakes, I have added an extra character that will play a bigger role in my conflict. I also need to work on using stage directions instead of a narration. This is particularly difficult because I end up writing drawn out sentences in my pursuit to be specific.
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ReplyDeleteCurrently, I am trying to revise my play in the best shape or form. It is a must that I work on my inciting incedent and character development for the scene. My main character or protagonist of the play, Avery, faces the struggle of losing her boyfriend. However, this conflict doesnt reach the stakes. I have to try to make this scene more dramatic and appealing to my audience. I can do this by putting one of the characters in danger, but that might be difficult to establish the scene because there are only two characters. I can also try to incorporate monologues into the play, so the audience can feel and understand what the characters are going through and what they are thinking at that specific moment. I also have to work on following the structure and format for typing it up.
I began my play at first with two characters name Shelly and Jacob . The conflict of this play was that Jacob been hiding a kid from Shelly after lying to her telling her she had a miscarriage I realized that this play wasn't realistic . so after getting back the first draft of the play I realized that I didn't utilize the 3D's such as discovery , decision and declaration. This provided a lot of confusion and made my characters hardly developed . Therefore , I had to change my play and make the conflict a girl who go down the wrong path in which she take drugs and come to find out her parents took her off the financial packet . I believe my play is very interesting because it gives the audience a sense of feeling in which they want to be in the play and be in the character's shoes. Without curiosity the play would need to raise the stakes for the characters. Overall I believe I did efficient in utilizing the 3D's and making the conflict clear .
ReplyDeleteI began my plat with just two characters initially . And , I just rushed to the conflict . After re-writing my play I decided to add a 3rd character and add more dialogue . After doing so , I think I gave myself more time to let the conflict develop . I originally wrote my play & neglected the director's packet . Once I started to use the packet I started to realize a change in my writing . I was suddenly able to actually create dialogue that helped to reach the climax , falling actions , resolution , etc . I decided that the reason for my main character making a big deal out of everything would be due to the fact that she is pregnant . I think the pregnancy will ad a optimistic twist too the play and it moves away from the negative mood of the play bought about in the beginning of the play .
ReplyDeleteI began my play with an idea from the movie precious. I wanted my play to be about a young girl struggling to get to a stressless life in the future however she can't do this because her had raped her at a very young adolescent age. But to give my play more conflit and drama I decied to include a 1st scene with her doctor so the actors and anyone who reads my play will understand why she decayed her self to help other people specifically young girls. Then I decided in my last scene thatbi would both of my main characters decided from different situations that need each other to actually continue their life's on the future because their oath ways are blocked by their terrible past life experiences.
ReplyDeleteWhile re-writing my play time and time again, I realized that my play really does appeal to me. I began to love it more after revising it so many times. It feels as though I can really personally relate to my character even though I really can't. When others have read my play, I have gotten both positive and negative feedback that has helped me make many changes to my play as a whole. By the end of the play, my main character is a changed person because of what she has gone through. During this process over all, I have learned to keep up with my work and how to take negative constructive citisism correctly.
ReplyDeleteRight now my play is in the stages of being complete after including the revisements from my peers and teachers. I am somewhat pleasee with my play because it is interesting and relatable. It includes topics that are relatable and well known by every teenager which makes it interesting and not boring to read.
ReplyDeletethe writing stages is demanding but it is helpful because it made me grow as a writing of tthe arts and as a writer period. Having to revise and rewrite over and over again allows me to realize my strengths and weaknesses. It allows me to know where i can improve in my writing in theatre class whether it is in the rising action or developing characters and/or a climax
After revising my first draft, I realized the direction I was going in was more like a movie. It also was not from original ideas totally. I decided to think outside of the box and write about a realistic story that would also be different. This process is difficult because I keep doubting the outcome of my story and I also feel like I don't have the sort of talent to be a playwright. Therefore, I'm going to do my best with the story I am trying to tell, and hopefully after revising multiple times, the whole thing will tie together.
ReplyDeleteI feel that my play is good where it is now, but it still needs some work. It is not yet completed, but with what is done it is a very good play. It has the potential to be something very interesting and as I keep working more and more on it, it gets better and better. Even though I didn't revise it, I am finishing it up so that I could just revise the whole play in one.
ReplyDeleteMy play actually has some truth to it, so revising it was hard I a way for me to change my life around. Revising my play actually helped me put some more content into it and be able to make it more outstanding. The only way for me to improve was to get feedback from my parents and siblings to improve the concept of my play. My play was not as forward and it made the reader somewhat confused. This was some critical feed back that was useful in changing it around. Also, my play had people entering out of nowhere which was too sudden and not subtle enough. This type of feedback helped me with my revision process of changing my play that way is was engaging to the reading and very understandable to everyone and not just me because I know the story first hand. My only issue is that because the play is correlates.so much to my life, I don't know how to just end it because my life is still going on but the play isn't. This is one aspect that I am still struggling on.
ReplyDeleteI believe that my play is typical to what people chose to write about but I think that it is unique in how the falling action occurs. I chose to write my play on an event that occurs in real life so my events wouldn't be too far-fetched. I do have to make some corrections to my climax and how it leads to my falling action. My peers gave me advice on how to properly write stage directions as well as how my exposition should occur. I also need to rethink on how I want my play to end because I left in suspense, as if there is unfinished business. I believe that by the time it is time to do my final draft my play will be in good shape because it is a play that will catch the readers attention. It's is believable and how the scenes are set up, people can be able to visualize the events occurring in real life.
ReplyDeleteIn this past week I have revised my play several times. Either the conflict in my play was too easy for my characters to solve or my play had no conflict at all. Then creating a solution to the conflict and ending the play took another several drafts. I still have to edit my main character's personality and background. But I think my play has an interseting plot that will keep the auidence from going to sleep. During class this week we have been learning about raising the stakes for our characters. I have decided to give my characters a life or death conflict that has a major plot twist at the end. I just have to finish typing it! My play shalll be a movie someday!
ReplyDeleteFor that fact that i did not do a first draft of my scene, I am quite behind. before i got started I was so confused and had so many questions. How do I transition between days? Where to even start? The scene that I finally came up with lacks intensity, in my mind. Today i learned that I was not allowed to use a telephone conversation in my scene. for this reason, I think I'm going to just start from scratch because my scene was boring anyway. I'm going to have to add more conflict, so that the stakes for my character are high and so that my scene will be interesting to an audience. So, I'm going to work on that as soon as possible so that I will be able to get some feedback before I have to turn in the final draft.
ReplyDeleteWhen rewriting my play I had to fix small little errors. They consisted of making the character's names in all Caps, making sure my stage directions were italics, and my lines were to the left. Also I made the plot more interesting. I made it so that the best friend betrays the other. By doing this, it brings more attention to the play and the ending is worth dying for. When reading my play to myself, I wanted more action and not have a play where the characters were boring. So I added more stage directions and made the ending exciting. When I received feedback from my first draft, my peers seem to like the plot. My two main characters do change at the end of the play. Also three people are killed at the end. From writing this play, I grew was a person by developing my creative side of me. It made me explore more ideas.
ReplyDeleteI feel like my play is good. It is interesting because it appeals to a wider audience and I feel like this is why others really like my play. I am so confident I feel like my play could be a part of a television episode. Since this is the case I feel as though it is too much like TV. While it appeals to problems in our society that most people have confronted it uses too many lines from that of TV. This use takes away some of the richness of the play as it is not as real at least in my eyes. So I feel like once I change the wording it will become more real and I then can work on other sections of this play.
ReplyDeleteRewriting my play has been somewhat difficult because I didn't know what I needed to improve on. I felt as though my play was good. I then realized that aspects of my play like the characters lacked quite a bit. There was nothing unique about my characters. It was difficult to tell which character was playing what role because they were really similar. I added more dialogue but made sure to add words and phrases that were unique to one character.
ReplyDeleteFor me, I really had to sit down and really think.about what my play is about. In my rewriting stage I am trying to fine a clear path for my main character to actually follow. I think with r writing it from scratch and thinking about the story set up and how I can change the story line for people who will be seeing this to really understand my main character's strife.in addition to that,I think that with adding more description to my characters and fixing my playwrights notes,i think that it will help me further my process of completing my play.
ReplyDeleteFor me, writing my play and figuring out the plot was the hardest thing. I knew I wanted to write my play about adultery but there was so much more that I needed to add besides that. After I figured out my plot roughly I wrote my first draft. My first draft had great potential but to take it to the next step, I needed to meet with Mr. Peterson and talk it out. After we drew the exposition, rising action, falling action and resolution I was clear on my play and was ready to rewrite.
ReplyDeleteFor me, writing my play and figuring out the plot was the hardest thing. I knew I wanted to write my play about adultery but there was so much more that I needed to add besides that. After I figured out my plot roughly I wrote my first draft. My first draft had great potential but to take it to the next step, I needed to meet with Mr. Peterson and talk it out. After we drew the exposition, rising action, falling action and resolution I was clear on my play and was ready to rewrite. In my opinion, my play is interesting because it deals with every day things and is something that I know I will have fun with as I continue to make revisions. By the end of my play, my main character is what I hope to be, someone who learns from mistakes can become stronger from those experiences.
ReplyDeleteI am currently still working on my play and have not been able to get it into class due to issues with a computer but I will have those issues straigtened out soon enough by tomorrow hopefully but anyway. the script of it is going well the problem is im having a bit of trouble putting the character into his perspective and brining him off the paper so to say. The idea im running with is a very interesting but sad story and tells how one can lose himself if he lets the factors get in. I will fix all of that in my character description however and then my play will be complete.
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ReplyDeleteMy play is going well except I have to make a few revisions. My play is going well because the audience can relate to my play since it is a common problem that everyone faces in a relationship. What I have to improve on is the plot, characters, and the setting of the scene. I have to work on the plot because in the beginning of the play, I show no sign or clues about how my characters' relationship is going down. For the characters, I have to improve on it because there is one character where they enter like 3 times and that might confuse the audience about why he/she is included. Lastly, I have to work on my setting because in each scene, they are in a different place and I show no sign of connection of where they are going fluently.
ReplyDeleteMy Play is coming along well. i have great ideas in mind, but sometimes putting it on paper is hard for me to do. So, what I'm learning to do is to take my time. I have begun to plan out my ideas better, and then figure out how to expand on them making them more appealing to others. I know what I see for my play and the images I see for it, but when writing it I have to make sure others will be able to see my same vision. Im going to have to take a better look at stage direction also. When thinking about a play you already imagine how the characters move, but when it comes times to write you have to figure out how to incooperate them and make sure they show and not tell. I have faced a few challenges with this process, but overall its going well, and I believe my play is very interesting. Im excited to see how its going to turn out.
ReplyDeleteMy play is in a rough stage at this point. It is at a rough stage in this process because I'm having trouble developing exposition. It seems like I got into the conflict way too early. I'm thinking about making my play into scenes which will help me go to each step in the play. I will develop my characters more and also take risks. I need to raise the stakes in my play because of the fact that will entertain the audience and give me more rubric points. My play is going to be much better once I incorporate the victims mom and also raise the stakes.
ReplyDeletenning. I knew exactly what i was going to write about. I wanted to write about something that anyone could relate to, which meant that my play would have to be realistic and something one would see in real life. One topic that reoccurs throughout life is infidelity, which is what my play is about. However, one problem i have is how to end my play. Do i let my character's anger get to her? Do i let the antagonist win? Are there more secrets? How do i end my play. I already fixed the beginning of my play so the audience is not confused, but there are still things i have to think about for the rest of my play and my monologue.
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ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, my play is interesting just because it basically discusses the change in roles between a male and a woman. For example where a man is usually the bread winner and the woman is the stay out home instead it's vice versa. Discussing that type of controversy and double standard I find it interesting and different from the others. However I believe I need to develop my characters more and give a little more of a conflict. Once I'm incorporated more of a plot and development amongst the characters I believe my play will be complete.
ReplyDeleteAs a beginner, I personally feel as though my play can be a little more interesting. Since it is based on a personal experience and the climax is more silent, I think that's the most challenging part for me to write. At the end, however, for me, all that matters is that I tried and that's all that counts. Each revision step and every single person that has helped me improve my play, I've taken their advice into consideration and actually used it for my play, which I think makes it even better.
ReplyDeleteAround this time my play was not really complete. I had got up to what i thought would be the climax of my play. However the more i had time to think about it the more I wanted to add to my play. When the project was first presented I looked at it as a hassle. However as i started to think about the opportunity that this project presented for me I began to put more thought into making the okay my own and unique. I realized that this play can be about whatever I wanted it to be about. This meant that my play could be as crazy, scary, tragic, or funny I wanted it to be. Therefore with deep reflection I decided to extend my play with suspense. This would put my audience more on their toes for what was to come next was very unexpected. Overall I know that my play is not that bad for my first time writing a play.
ReplyDeletewhen I first heard about the project, I was very scared about the idea of creating a whole play by myself. I knew that was going to be the biggest challenge of the year and I had no idea for the topic. then, I decided to put a topic that most related to my life so I would stay interested in continuing to write the play through the process. Between the 1st and 2nd drafts my play was not finished at all. I didn't think that the plot or the characters were fully developed. however, when my play was read to the class the audience was both shocked and wanted the play to be continued. I then realized that my play ended up being very interesting and I knew that from now on I can write plays and similar acts with ease.
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